Comments on: The Playing Field - A Short Story http://elizadashwood.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-playing-field-a-short-story/ Writing inspiration in the never-ending battle against writer's block Sat, 05 Jul 2008 08:24:11 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=MU By: elizadashwood http://elizadashwood.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-playing-field-a-short-story/#comment-262 elizadashwood Tue, 04 Mar 2008 21:25:42 +0000 http://elizadashwood.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-playing-field-a-short-story/#comment-262 Hey there, Thanks for the comments. I had considered extending the story and revisiting Justin's character. I'm thinking about some of the points you raised. Thanks again! E Hey there,

Thanks for the comments. I had considered extending the story and revisiting Justin’s character. I’m thinking about some of the points you raised. Thanks again! E

]]> By: Tony http://elizadashwood.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-playing-field-a-short-story/#comment-235 Tony Sat, 01 Mar 2008 12:43:59 +0000 http://elizadashwood.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-playing-field-a-short-story/#comment-235 Hi Eliza, I think Justin is a great character and your evocation of the school playground is really convincing. Have you written more about the same character? You should. I would be fasicnated to know these things: does he ever fight back? what is his family like? does he have any friends at all? what is this neighbourhood like where he lives? does he read comic books or have anything else that he escapes into? I know you might have thought of this as a stand alone piece, but I can't help wanting you to go further in. Good to meet you the other night at Canons Gait... I'll try to use some of your prompts myself cheers Tony Hi Eliza,
I think Justin is a great character and your evocation of the school playground is really convincing. Have you written more about the same character? You should. I would be fasicnated to know these things:
does he ever fight back?
what is his family like?
does he have any friends at all?
what is this neighbourhood like where he lives?
does he read comic books or have anything else that he escapes into?
I know you might have thought of this as a stand alone piece, but I can’t help wanting you to go further in.
Good to meet you the other night at Canons Gait…
I’ll try to use some of your prompts myself
cheers
Tony

]]> By: elizadashwood http://elizadashwood.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-playing-field-a-short-story/#comment-186 elizadashwood Thu, 21 Feb 2008 23:30:11 +0000 http://elizadashwood.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-playing-field-a-short-story/#comment-186 Thanks T, I took a lot of time over this narrative despite its brevity. I'm glad you liked it and appreciate your feedback. I'll be posting more soon. Your comment made me smile. E Thanks T,

I took a lot of time over this narrative despite its brevity. I’m glad you liked it and appreciate your feedback. I’ll be posting more soon. Your comment made me smile. E

]]> By: Thomas R http://elizadashwood.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-playing-field-a-short-story/#comment-185 Thomas R Thu, 21 Feb 2008 19:48:06 +0000 http://elizadashwood.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-playing-field-a-short-story/#comment-185 Wow that was depressing. I could feel the terrible isolation J lives in and especially the cruel way the teacher got back at him for correcting her. A bruised ego wont stop taking revenge just because it's a child. I suppose that may be true. I like how you understated the things that happen instead of going all melodramatic. Less is more. Looking forward to more. t Wow that was depressing. I could feel the terrible isolation J lives in and especially the cruel way the teacher got back at him for correcting her. A bruised ego wont stop taking revenge just because it’s a child. I suppose that may be true.
I like how you understated the things that happen instead of going all melodramatic. Less is more.
Looking forward to more.
t

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